Log in

No account? Create an account
08 October 2009 @ 11:55 pm
It's official:  
Kishimoto is so gad dang lazy that he puts all the Konoha-nin in matching ponchos.  No wonder Shikamaru is his favorite character now.

I haven't posted in a while, mostly because I've been constantly doing one of two things:

1.) Angsting about how I'm going to get Arranged finished; and

2.) Writing Arranged.

And I haven't been posting because I don't honestly know what to say.  So I'm going use livejournal as it was intended for once, and journal in it, and just talky-talk about Arranged until I feel better.

So, I'm not happy with the last chapter.  At all.  I was posting on a time-limit, and it prevented me from going back over it and making sure it was clean.  If I'd had that time, I imagine that I would have ended up rewriting a couple of sections as I usually do.   I mean, everything happened pretty much as I had planned, but with little to no introspection and, like, zero heart.  Plus, it wasn't even until Flamehead pointed it out to me that I realized I'd left out the untagged dialogue.  Boo!  That's my favorite part; the untagged dialogue invented the fic!  I had a good one for that chapter, too.

Howsomever, I have to move forward.  And I have a lot of hope for this chapter I'm currently writing.  It feels a lot smoother, and I have a good image in my mind of what I'm building, and I think the prose is cleaner, too, but maybe that's just me.  I feel like these middle chapters have been so hard to push my way through, culminating with the dreaded chapter ten, but now I'm at the point where I'm starting to wind things down, and the momentum is pulling me along.  It's a big relief.  Writing Arranged has been a huge learning experience for me; other than Practicing Safe Sex it's the only chapter story that I have finished/will finish.  Ever in my life.  And PSS only had four chapters; it was more like four related oneshots.  Anyway, I think my next project is going to benefit greatly from what I learned.  I truly feel like Arranged was a practice fic for this upcoming humdinger.  :D  I can't wait to get started on it!  But I shall wait, because Arranged comes first.

I have this crazy goal; I'd really like to have Arranged finished by the end of October so that I can work on the new fic for Nanowrimo.  But if it seems impossible I'm not going to push it.  I have a tendency to submit crappy work when on a deadline *cough*chapterten*cough* so if the end of October is hurrying up too quickly, I'm not going to worry about it.  I can have my own, mini December-wrimo.  :D  But here's the major issue with the finishing of Arranged.  (Shhhh, it's a secret.)  I've been purposely pushing the ending of the fic back because I've been waiting and hoping that Kishi would give me a glimpse into the way Danzo fights, so that I can write the final fight scene with some semblance of accuracy.  All I've got going for me now is that I know  he has a sharingan, and he has that dead arm thing, and he never seems to move around.  Initially I wasn't going to have a fight scene with Danzo.  I suck at writing them, for one thing, but I also planned on having him removed in a more stealthy manner.  But I've changed my mind and opted for the big showdown, because the audience deserves it, and I need to stop being a loser and actually try to write things I'm not good at.  Besides, the next fic is going to have a least two big fights, so I can't put this off forever.  So this is something I'm going to ask for advice about.  Here, and at the end of the next chapter:

Anyone wanna help me invent a couple of cool/scary powers for Danzo?  Or help me extrapolate what his fighting style might be?  *bats eyelashes*  Because this really is not my skill.  Heck, I don't even like the ninjutsu and genjutsu in Naruto; I much prefer the taijutsu.  It's more fun to write, and less stupidly epic.  Like:

"I shall now use the power of the solar system to blast you into smithereens!" 
"Well, you can't, because I have absolute magic beaver defense!!!"  
"Well I have absolute offense, and it's more absolute than your most absolute absoluteness.  OVER 9000!!!!!"

Nah, gimme hand-to-hand combat any day over that crap.  I liked Naruto better when every single character wasn't omnipotent.

I could be so offbase with this end of October goal.  I am not even sure how many  more chappies there will be.  I'm thinking, like, four?  Three or four?  I dunno.  Three might be doable by then.  But probably not four.

Anyhoo, other fics in the works:

The Shika/Saku one that I've been harping on for ages is stalled right in the middle, in favor of Arranged.  It may not get done by the end of October.  I did finish my Halloween contribution to FFN, and it's a Shika/Tema lemon that's more hilarious and humiliating than it is sexy.  Also, here's the cool thing, it was done in semi-collaboration with Jan Lee.  We each wrote a story whose plots overlap a bit, and Jan's is actually sexy.  But she has plenty of that humor, too.  She just wrote this great story and I was inspired to steal her idea write a related fic using her extraneous characters.  We might have a third contributor, too, who shall remain nameless so's not to put the pressure on her.  But if it works out I think I'll die of squee.  :D  Anyway, I'm going to post that Shika/Tema on my lemon account, which I'm sure will tick off those who are expecting Shika/Saku first.  But I have no choice!  I ain't putting this puppy on PSI.  Uh-uh, no way!

Alright.  Time to type a bit more on my chapter and go to sleep.  Life is still expecting me to participate tomorrow.  :)

BTW, I haven't responded to most of my reviews, yet, which I apologize for.  I've just been so motivated to write, which almost never happens to me right after a chapter is finished.  So I'm using that motivation, and who knows?  It may result in a second chapter this week.  Then I'll respond to all the reviews at once.

Current Mood: busybusy
Aquarius Galuxy: Temariaquarius_galuxy on October 9th, 2009 06:36 am (UTC)
If you don't like chapter 10 that much, why don't you consider going back after the current chapter and editing it? and then post a note somewhere to inform your readers of the changes, so they can go back and read it if they want to. =P (I've done it before, it wasn't all that easy, but then there's always going to be new readers who will read the chapter for the first time =p)

Hooray for finishing (and planning to finish) fics! =D

... Danzo... I can imagine him using his Sharingan and having weird eye attacks, as well as moving pretty fast and hitting people with that walking stick of his. Aside from that, I'm not much help. =P Will want to have him beaten up though! (Seeing as how Temari's awesomely long-ranged, he might have to use genjutsu or something on her XD)

Am keen on that Shika/Tema lemon, do I really have to hunt it down myself? =P

Looking forward to the update!
psiteleportpsiteleport on October 9th, 2009 08:10 pm (UTC)
I sort of suck at going back and editing once published. I just have way too many new things I want to work on. I mean, I'll edit a chapter to DEATH before posted, but once posted I have no motivation whatsoever, unless someone just points out blatant grammatical errors that I must fix. :)

Who are you on FFN? I'll send you a PM with where the Shika/Tema is going to be if you like. :)
Aquarius Galuxyaquarius_galuxy on October 10th, 2009 12:34 am (UTC)
Okay =P

I go by the same name, Aquarius Galuxy, but I was under the impression that they didn't like links to sites outside FFN =P
(Anonymous) on October 9th, 2009 03:29 pm (UTC)
Oh I see how it is
Jan Lee get's a tag, but I don't?!?! Gah, I'm gonna go drown my sorrows in a bottle of scotch, ten in the morning be damned. D:D:D:

but really-- how funny a coincidence that you're hoping to finish Arranged by the end of October so you can do Nanowrimo, since I'm in the exact same boat with TAS. and lol, we both have three/fourish chapters left to do as well! stop copying me dammit, I've started looking over my shoulder when I type because of you.

I understand your frustrations with kishimoto--and as bad as he is, he still isn't half as bad as Kubo. that dude just turned out 17 pages of nothing, and I'm not sure how much more stalling I can take before my eyes bleed all shirigan style. And unfortunately for you, I don't think we'll be seeing Danzo fight any time soon either--it looks like Madra's once again taken the spotlight.

I agree with you too--cooking up potential abilities in the Naruto-verse at the kage level is kinda inevitably asking for a god-mod. they're all so over-the-top, it's hard to follow any train of logic. (especially if he has the ultimate It-can-do-whatever-the-hell-you-want-it-to jutsu maker, Shirigan. LAAAME)

I'll give it some thought at work today, and If I can manage to come up with anything that's remotely logical and entertaining, I'll throw you a PM or something. until then, it's good to know you're writing, and I only hope that knowing your plans for the next month helps spur me on to do the same.


psiteleportpsiteleport on October 9th, 2009 08:07 pm (UTC)
Re: Oh I see how it is
Jan Lee get's a tag, and so do I! Yay, I'm gonna go buy a puppy in honor of my happiness and give it to you, ten in the morning be damned. :D:D:D

Fixed. :D

It would actually be awesome to do Nano with/alongside you, because I'm not planning on posting the chapters as I go on FFN. I'm going to save it until it's done and clean it up and what-not before I submit. So maybehz I could just send my chapters to you when I'm done, so someone's keeping me accountable and giving feedback.

In the end, it might be better if Danzo doesn't fight for a while. Then I can make up whatever crap I want. I was just positive that the moment I published the fight, that he would do something totally different in the manga.

But it hardly matters anymore. My fic is officially AU, what with the new 4th Ninja War crap. You can bet your sweet bippy that THAT'S not going to show up in my fic. 4th War...IGNORE'D!!!
(Anonymous) on October 10th, 2009 05:20 am (UTC)
Re: Oh I see how it is
lol, you didn't have to do that but I'm definitely going puppy shopping tomorrow. :D

cool, nano parters unite! is yours going to be fanfiction? I'm planning on using this as an opportunity to write something wholly original, which to me is like 10 times scarier than what I've been doing.

yeah...after this weeks chapter I just thought "gah...psi's not gonna like this one bit." But fret not, I still think your fic's got enough realism and good storytelling going for it to be awesome regardless of canonimity.

...wait, what was that last word? damn, I'm way to tired to be replying like this.... my bad.
Erin: Gaaratiredbuthyper on October 10th, 2009 07:10 am (UTC)
Man, your hypothetical battle KILLED ME. The real one should go just like that!

As for Danzo ... that really is a tough issue. I've been trying to hold out to see Madara's fighting style. But this chapter we learn that he "is a shell of a former self" and supposedly pretty powerless but he also says he has the power of all the bijuu he's extracted so far. Well, excuse me but the BIJUU WERE PRETTY POWERFUL. Not to mention -- hey, Tobimadara, YOU CAN SUCK PEOPLE INTO YOUR FACE and NO ONE CAN HIT YOU. That seems kind of powerful to me.

But how boring/unfeasible is it to write a fight scene in which all attacks pass through Madara and Madara never attacks back?! Urgh.

Danzo ... it seems to me he'd rely on his Sharingan or that's all we've seen him do and it makes sense since his body is not in the best of shape. He'd also be ruthless, striking immediately to kill. (That's all I got ... sorry. If I come up with anything better I'll share.)